ocean swirls and churns
feelings thought dead resurface
rumbles of desire
tides wash out unconsciousness
deposit new embraces
—
My first knowing try of this “female” Japanese form. I wrote some over a decade ago, but doubt I really understood the form. I’m not sure I understand it yet, but Toni is helping out over at
dVerse MeetingTheBar. 🙂
Mystical Strings 
I love those rumblings of desire that are resurfacing…perfect for a tanka!
Very powerful metaphor in this. Beautiful!
certainly have grasped the tanka by the tail – love the punch of those last 2 lines
Ocean eYes..
of semblance
have no waves
of
bys..:)
feelings thought dead resurface
rumbles of desire
Sensuously challenging when desire is rekindled
Hank
My comment has disappeared! I am so glad I came back to read again. the last two lines are incredible.