ocean swirls and churns
feelings thought dead resurface
rumbles of desire
tides wash out unconsciousness
deposit new embraces
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My first knowing try of this “female” Japanese form. I wrote some over a decade ago, but doubt I really understood the form. I’m not sure I understand it yet, but Toni is helping out over at
dVerse MeetingTheBar. 🙂
Mystical Strings 
Excellent learning poem! I hope you will write more of these. For every 20 I write, I trash all but 1 and maybe, just maybe, keep a few thoughts to work on in future. I like the sensuality in this. The form lends itself well to sensuality.
The kisei works so welll (and could actually have worked for Walt’s prompt as well)… an excellent tanka.
love the “rumbles of desire”
This is beautiful!! 🙂
I love those ‘rumbles of desire’ and the tides depositing new embraces!
Lovely tanka! ❤
You have some beautiful thoughts
Great lines 🙂
Ah, learning to love again. It does come back to you; if you open yourself to it. Beautifully penned, I think your “experiment” succeeded nicely.
Beautiful writing. I love, “tides wash out unconsciousness”